I took off my Halloween costume, washed the paint off my face, put on my pajamas, brushed my teeth, and went to bed. I was almost asleep when I first heard the sound of someone laughing. Everyone in my family was asleep, so I went upstairs to see what it was. When I got upstairs, I saw a few figures laughing in kitchen, so I called out "Mom? Dad?" One of the figures turned around and turned on the kitchen light. That's when I realized that the figures were vampires. I realized that one of them wasn't just an ordinary vampire though, she was the prettiest of them all. She had the most beautiful hair I have ever seen and was the average height of a human. She scanned me over a couple of times and then said “Are you Tayli?” “Uh, yeah” I said with some hesitation. “My name is Ophelia and I need you to come with my friends and I to our cave by the river”. As I thought this over I said “I don’t really have choice do I?” “No, not really” Ophelia said. When we got to the cave, she told me to sit down. I sat down on a rock near the entrance in case I needed to make a quick escape. One of the other vampires came and started talking to me for awhile. As we were talking, Ophelia came over to where we were sitting and I realized that she looked really familiar. As she sat down, I study her carefully and realized that it was my cousin! I looked around before I said anything and realized that all the vampires were my friends. Surely they were playing a prank on me. I must’ve had a look on my face because “Ophelia” said “Guys, she figured it out. She knows it’s us” We all started laughing and hung out until we got tired.
Creepy vampire cousin stories are great! I like the twist and you made vampires more relateable--this would be great as a start of a longer work. Did you know Opelia is also a famous character in "Hamlet", a Shakespeare play. Long story, but cool choice of a name. As you revise, add figurative language so your writing isn't dead (bad vampire joke)! Good work here Tayli!
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