Apple Pie
Apple pie is definitely the best Thanksgiving food ever. Apple pie is the best with its amazing taste and texture. According to "Popular Thanksgiving Pies" on "incrediblethings.com" " 20% like apple pie, 19% like strawberry, 16% like pumpkin, 13% cherry, 9% blueberry, 8% pecan, 8% Lemon maringue, 5% chocolate, 2% Chess." In conclusion, apple pie is most loved by americans, you should love it to.
That was great! I really liked how much information you gave the readers. How would it sound if you did an expanded moment for a description?
ReplyDeleteGood job Spencer! I like your quote, those are interesting statistics. I haven't tried apple pie yet, but it sounds good. What would it look like if you explained a little more after your quote? Keep it up!
ReplyDeleteGood job Spencer! I like your quote, those are interesting statistics. I haven't tried apple pie yet, but it sounds good. What would it look like if you explained a little more after your quote? Keep it up!
ReplyDeleteReally good job! I liked how you stated at the beginning that you like apple pie. What would it look like if you only put the percent of how many people like apple pie to how many people like pumpkin pie for an example?
ReplyDeleteReally good job! I liked how you stated at the beginning that you like apple pie. What would it look like if you only put the percent of how many people like apple pie to how many people like pumpkin pie for an example?
ReplyDeleteExcellent evidence and writing. You got to switch around the way you write it though because there are so many spaces and numbers it's confusing. Instead of a direct quote, consider summarizing. Good work!
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