My personal Narrative(Revised)
By Brodie Larsen
Hi, I’m Brodie, as you can probably tell. I’m going to tell you about some of my hobbies and things i like to do. Equally important is that writing is Is definitely going to be on this list. I still have no clue how I got to be in Honors Language Arts of all things. I’m good at science not this! I guess reading could have been why, but that’s for later.
For starters one of my favorite things to do is work-on and race cars. My family has been working on cars for a while so that might have something to do with it. Anyway my dad, uncle, and grandpa are all mechanics but my grandpa recently retired. I someday hope to work in designing cars but still will work on them often. I wish it was a better industry and that the people that give hard working mechanics a bad reputation would stop being cheaters!
Another of my hobbies is reading, I love to read. I’m currently waiting to get the fifth book in the Michael Vey series. (Which by the way are really really good). The main reason I like reading is imagery, such as, “The salty smell of the water, with the sound of the waves crashing against the beach, and the feel of the sand in between my toes." All in all that is really the main reason I like read.
To summarize my favorite things to do are cars and reading. I think reading and cars couldn't be more different than an elephant and a mouse.Don’t tell anyone but Maybe just a very very big amount of me enjoyed writing this a lot.
i really liked your writing! What would it look like if you capitalized it?
ReplyDeleteI like how descriptive you were in your writing! I hope that one day you can become a car designer! What would your writing look like like if you checked your punctuation?
ReplyDeleteGood job! I like all the simile's you had. But there was some thing capitalized shouldn't have been capitalized. Other wise, really good job!
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