If there was a world where everyone loved each other just as much as they loved themselves, it would be a much better place than where we are now. Families and friends would get along better, and we would agree more often. In other words, we would be much more kind and respectful to each other. We would treat even those we don't know with just as much respect as everyone else. Racism would no longer be a thing, and everyone would be included, and our race would no longer matter to anyone. Discrimination would be a thing of the past, unlike our world we live in today. Bullying would also no longer be a thing. Instead of being rude and angry at each other, we would help each other out when we needed it, and would keep the peace.
Our communities would be affected drastically, along with our families. We would be able to come to an agreement with our city governments easier than ever before. We would be able to work together with our families and communities, and we would listen to both sides of something before we made a decision and judged somebody else. In the end, we would see the good and potential in everyone, and would be kind to all different types of people, no matter who they are.
Good job Colin! This is really good writing. I liked the points you made about no more bullying or racism. Your paragraphs looked really good, but what would it look like if you added some figurative language? Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteGreat work Colin! I really liked that your brought-up racism and discrimination. I think that would be the first thing to go. Solid writing here. I'd echo Emily's idea with adding figurative language. Well done!
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