Monday, February 22, 2016
In a world were everyone loves others as much as they loved themselves, there would be less greediness. People would be willing to share everything they had, so we could work together harmony. Families and communities would change, too. There would be less fighting because everyone is friends. There wouldn't be thieves, murderers, bank robbers, etc., because everyone would want to help others. Life would be very different (and very good) if everyone loved everyone.
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Great job! You did a really good job at coming up with things that would change if we all loved each other as much as we loved ourselves. What would it look like if you added in some more sentences?
ReplyDeleteNice job! I really liked it when you said," we could work together in harmony." What do you think your blog post would look like if you ident? Overall, great job!
ReplyDeleteGreat job, i liked how you included there would be less fighting. What would your writing look like if you added more details and were more descriptive?
ReplyDeleteThat was really good. what would it look like if you lengthened your paragraph a bit more>.
ReplyDeleteI actually appreciated that you dove right in to the prompt and answered it well with the main idea of greediness. It was a fresh breath of air. To revise, I'd look at adding a couple more examples but you had great writing here. Thanks!
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