Sometimes we are mean to others and don’t think twice about it, but when others are mean to us our whole world falls apart. We often care too much about ourselves and don't recognize that the people around us have feelings too. If the world loved the people around them as much as they love themselves, everyone’s world would drastically change.
In a world like this things in the home and in the world would become 10x better. Brothers and sisters wouldn’t fight, and children would always respect their parents. There would also be no world wars and no content between counties. Overall in a world where everyone loved others as much as themselves everyone would be very happy. (:
It's very true the world would be a different place if we loved each other more! But what would this peace be with more examples and real life situations?
ReplyDeleteGreat job Tilly!!! I really liked how you talked about us being mean to other people and not even noticing it. What would it look like if your writing had more examples about how it could affect the home?
ReplyDeleteThis is really good Tilly! How would it look like if you talked more about everyone loving everyone else, even if they don't know them? Again this was really good! Keep up the good writing!
ReplyDeleteAwesome Tilly! Your totally right! What would it look like if you added a couple more comments in the right spot? :)
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I really liked your introduction! It was a great example of what would change and what is going on in our world. How would it look like if you added in some more examples of what would change? You did a really good job!
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ReplyDeleteGood job, Tilly! I liked how you added a lot of details and examples. What would your writing look like if you added more commas?
ReplyDeleteNice job! I loved your whole entire blog post because it is all so true! What do you think your blog post would look like if you added more examples of what would change? Overall, awesome!
ReplyDeleteGreat writing! Yes, use more examples to make your point. Good summary writing though:)
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